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My life is but a broken bottle
washed upon the shore in
little p  
      i
         e
        c
          e
    s         
that catch the Sun's careless eye
and spins them into spun glass,
washed and scrubbed clean
by the gritty, fragrant ocean.

At one time, inside this bottle lay
[a message]
of HOPE, FORTitude
and ...........compassion...........
No instead there lies a rotted pile of
srcabmled wrods melted and bled
by the same FORCE that
bbbbbrrrrreeeeeeaaaatttthhhheeesss

----------------Life---------------------------

My life hence forth seems dull, dry, and
c/r/a/c/k/i/n/g like weathered paint chips.
It has grown stale, and        putrid          .
Perhaps a breath of SpRiNg can renew it?
Like the persistant O----Flower-----O BREAKING
free
from the mud and soil, I refuse to
Give
Up.......





Give... up... what?
:iconvioletmasquerade:

Author's Comments

An experiment with words.

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:iconennuiiunne:
Ahh aweesome. I really love it. It's vibrant and bright and fun to read but it really has a message in it. It's not just messy words and disjointed syllables, its a poem. I love it.

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I don't kiss the lines with rhythm and rhyme the way I used to.
I write with a feather sword in my own blood.
:iconvioletmasquerade:
Thanks so much! I need to go back and edit it to really give it an impact, but it was nice just to get the emotions out on paper!

--
How vain it is to sit down to write when you have not stood up to live.
-Henry David Thoreau
:iconennuiiunne:
You'll make it great. Don't overthink it though, or it'll lsot the effect. It's great already!

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I don't kiss the lines with rhythm and rhyme the way I used to.
I write with a feather sword in my own blood.

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